In our peer assessment, we averaged 46 out of 60; which is inside a level 3 at the
top end. We then reviewed the comments and noted the most reoccurring ones.
Key points:
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Looks too much like a trailer
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Take out or change the voiceover
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Take out the interview
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Too fast at points
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Lighting in the bed is too dark
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More of Megan in the lake
How were these fixed?
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We took out some of the alter egos to make the
sequence look more like an opening scene, focusing more on the main character
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The voiceover has been removed to create more
enigma codes about what is wrong with the main protagonist
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Interview was removed and replaced with scenery
shots instead
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We ignored this because we believed the pace was
acceptable with the confused nature of the scene
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This was removed and then re-filmed with more
lighting, in exactly the same concept
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We added a few extra snippets of the lake shot
towards the end of the scene
